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re:Virals 534December 19, 2025
Susan Yavaniski
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Welcome to re:Virals, The Haiku Foundation’s weekly commentary feature on some of your favorites among the best contemporary haiku and senryu written in English. In the host chair today is Susan Yavaniski. This week’s poem, chosen by Sudha Devi Nayak is:

distant stars—
the refugee mother rewrites
her lullaby

—Hifsa Ashraf
Haiku Foundation Haiku Dialogue, October 29, 2025

Introducing this poem, Sudha writes:

The mother in this heartrending haiku is a refugee in a distant land singing to her child under different skies, different stars. Displaced from her home and country, in a state of fearful exile, exposed to the hazards of living in an unfamiliar environment, she still has to comfort her child. Her lullabies are no longer the joyful ones she once sang but laced with sadness and heartbreak. There are tears in her voice and she does not know how long she will remain a refugee, whether she will find welcome and a home in a foreign land or whether at all she can return to everything she knew and loved.

Hers is not a new story. She carries the story of all migrant populations forced to flee their countries as a result of war and violence and persecution, in search of homes and livelihoods. They will always carry the memories of places left behind and perhaps in their hearts will never truly belong to the places to which they have migrated, and they may never find the acceptance they desire. They are confronted with an uncertain future. As Salman Rushdie says: “Exile is an endless paradox: looking forward by always looking backwards.”

Host comment (Susan Yavaniski):

For many readers, this week’s verse will trigger a visceral emotional response, familiar as most are with the plight of millions of refugees worldwide, the majority of whom are women and children. Like Sudha, we immediately intuit the fear, heartbreak, tears, and sadness of the mother’s plight.

Yet at the heart of this senryu is an act of will and empowerment. Beneath “distant stars,” in a situation in which the fundamental reality she has known has shifted, a mother, in a small but significant way, asserts herself as a participating author of her own and of her child’s destiny, “rewriting” the foundational song that will not only comfort her infant, but shape the child’s development.* Ashraf’s verse, heartrending though it may be, equally suggests the adaptability and the resilience which humans often summon in the face of adversity.

Reading this poem in the midst of this Christmas season, the particular constellation of images—stars, refugee, mother, and by inference, infant—recalls the Biblical story of the birth of Jesus, particularly the account of mother and father fleeing their home with their infant son, taking refuge in Egypt to protect their child from King Herod’s threat of execution. Like this week’s verse, the ancient story rouses sympathy for those in like circumstances and offers an example of perseverance and hope in times of difficulty.

Wishing everyone peace and courage in the coming year.

Pamela Garry:

Before the exodus, the desperate mother prayed for her family to be transported. Upon arrival, her prayers turned to returning home.

Radhamani Sarma:



Hifsa Ashraf ‘s powerful verse portrays love, love lost, and the agony of separation from a mother’s point of view. In three lines, every choice of word conveys feelings of despair.

The very first line, “distant stars,” refers to her children living on an alien soil. Maybe they are hungry, doing hard work earning their own livelihood in their new country. The word ” distant” denotes a sense of longing for them, and the hyphen implies her endless conjecture about their situation.

In the second line, “the refugee mother rewrites,” the mother recalls her children’s presence. Whether they were separated by war, religious persecutions, crime or fear of punishment, whatever be the reason, the absence of her near and dear ones is a misery that gnaws at her.

The mother takes refuge in music, in a world of her own. She “rewrites / her lullaby” to take into account present circumstances. When a child is born, there is merriment, a mood of happiness and festivity; but for the “refugee mother” joy is short-lived. The lullaby is transformed into a longing for reunification and safety.

“If music be the food of love, play on” is a quote from Twelfth Night by Shakespeare. Here, music is the food for love, for love lost, for separation, for anxiety, and for a longing for reunification. Only a soothing melody can provide solace for a refugee mother’s heart and soul.



Urszula Marciniak—learning a new language:

The stars are far away. Maybe even so far away that they’re invisible. Another hemisphere. And the ones the refugee mother sees look alien. She already knows she won’t return to her homeland. She’s learning a new language, and her child will be rocked to sleep with a new version of a lullaby. She doesn’t want her child to long for something unattainable. She wants her new homeland to be her child’s homeland from the very beginning. She looks up again, and it’s still not her sky.

Author Hifsa Ashraf says:

I often write about war-related issues, and one of my poetry collections specifically focuses on the stories of refugee mothers and children. This haiku tells the story of a mother who, after being displaced by conflict, tries to hold on to a sense of normalcy and comfort by rewriting her lullaby, reshaping it to fit a world forever changed.

This haiku tells the tale of a mother who is forced to flee her home due to war, carrying with her not just physical burdens, but emotional ones too. In a foreign land (in a refugee camp), under a different sky, she tries to soothe her child, or she misses her child, but the lullaby she once knew no longer fits or she forgot it due to the traumatic experience of war. She rewrites her lullaby, perhaps in a new language, or with new memories to comfort her child in unfamiliar surroundings or deeply in a grief sharing her feelings of longing for her child who is no longer with her.

This opening sets a vast, quiet, almost timeless atmosphere. Distant stars symbolize both wonder and longing. Their distance means disconnection, loss of touch, and/or a sense of being far from home.

A lullaby is intimate, holding some personal touch with it which may be a memory or the only way to console her child who may or may not be with her. To rewrite it may mean changing the words, melody, or even language, adapting her tenderness and love to new surroundings, new fears, and hopes.

The contrast between stars and a mother’s lullaby depicts the emotional depth, showing how even in exile, love and care don’t fade.

Saturday, June 13, 2020

re:Virals - haiku commentary


re:Virals 249


Welcome to re:Virals, The Haiku Foundation’s weekly poem commentary feature on some of the finest haiku ever written in English. This week’s poem was 


 plumes of smoke 
 curl around... 
 the half-opened roses 


 — Hifsa Ashraf, haikuniverse (2019)


Corine Timmer considers life’s rituals:


Each time I read this poem, a different image jumps to mind. One of them is a coffin in a place of worship; a child’s coffin. On top of the coffin is a bouquet of half open white roses. The roses are half open because the child died before reaching puberty. The roses are white because white petals represent peace after death and happiness in the afterlife. White also represents innocence. The plumes of scented smoke curling around the roses are from burning incense. Incense is used in rituals and ceremonies all over the world, including funerals. The word “curl” is a powerful choice. Like the plumes of smoke curling around, the image lingers in my mind, creating an almost magical atmosphere. The curls are like a final farewell. It’s hard to let go of a loved one. Rituals can help us by not only dosing the grieving process but adding a little magic, too. The second image that jumps to mind is of a group of young, teenage boys secretly smoking. At that age, smoking is perceived as exclusive to the adult world, a world every thirteen- or fourteen-year-old can’t wait to be a part of. I remember when I started smoking. My friends and I would try to outdo each other blowing smoke rings. The boys showed off, trying to impress the girls. In this scenario, the half open roses could be a metaphor for young teenage girls. A rose is the perfect flower choice for this hypothesis as it is commonly associated with love, confidentiality, and femininity.

Radhamani Sarma enters the garden:


Who doesn’t like the aroma of roses? The first line of this poem begins with a stunning image, taking us by surprise. “plumes of smoke” leads on to the second line, curling around roses, themselves a colorful bunch.

Possibly, the poet alludes to roses as a garden’s pride, all surrounded by foggy, smoky clusters during a wintry charm of blooms. This may be a reference to a cold winter with intense puffs of foggy smoke. The narrator admires the arresting blooms, the slow blossoms.

The third line’s shy offspring of roses slowly opens. This could be an entire garden, surrounded by the spiraling pale, a foggy pall of gloom, not giving a nod of go-ahead; hence, half-opened roses.

Another possible inference is that somewhere near the garden’s fence, a caring gardener is busy burning gathered branches causing smoke all around “the half-opened roses.” Obviously, there is an admirable emphasis on the wording; say it again and again and an auto-reply emerges. The poet’s acute observation is testified here.

Cezar-Florin Ciobîcă meditates on the apocalyptic:


The first part of this haiku highlights the threat looming in the area due to smoke, an image that immediately leads us to think about environmental pollution, a major problem of contemporary society, a highly industrialized one; or maybe, why not, it’s about an area affected by war, a bombed one.

The second part brings to the fore the disturbingly heartbreaking image of half-opened roses. The empathetic reader can feel how these flowers seem to somehow cry for help. It’s like seeing a baby wrapped in diapers left among the smoky ruins. The contrast between the two sides is so well constructed that it simply leaves you speechless and forces you to wonder what should be done. Unfortunately, humanity is too greedy for progress, supremacy and money and forgets to take care of the soul of the planet – mother nature with all its wonders.

The ellipsis can suggest tears of pain or those black plumes of smoke that stretch across the sky, deposit on the lungs of the planet and which, unfortunately, cannot be erased. At the same time, they invite us to meditate deeply on the consequences of pollution and war.

The whole picture is an apocalyptic one, and we should all feel guilty; accomplices, because we stand by idly. If we continue in this disastrous way, it means that we deserve the worst fate in the world. Let’s wake up and make the planet a better and more beautiful place for our children!